"Kill the pig! Cut his throat! Bash him in!" Those words keep going through my head and they make me feel strong, brave, and like I can do anything. When I hear that chant it makes me feel crazy like my blood is racing through my body at one hundred miles per hour. When we surrounded Robert I almost forgot that he was a kid. I felt like he was an animal that we found in a covert, and I wanted to kill him, stick a spear into him and see the blood gush out of his body. I wanted to get really close so that I could see his fear and hear his screams. When Jack grabbed him and pretended to slit his throat I could see in his eyes that he forgot for a moment that Robert was a kid and not a pig. Jack is great. He is uncompromising in his desire to hunt and kill pigs. That's the most important thing to him. It's infuriating that Ralph keeps spoiling our plans and getting in the way of our hunting all the time. Who cares about the fire? Who cares about shelter? We're on this great adventure with infinite possibilities for fun. Piggy and Ralph snivel about wanting to be saved. They talk sagely about protecting the littluns and they act like mini adults.
Ralph surprises me sometimes. He was the one who wanted to continue climbing this mountain to find the beast. Now it's dark and we might just make a huge blunder by blindly walking right into the beast's lair. That would be fun! Kill the pig! Cut his throat! Bash him in! I can't get those words out of my head. I hope we can kill something soon.
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Kira, i like how you start out with "kill the pig! Cut his throat! Bash him in" its a nice strong start. I also like how you added "They talk sagely about protecting the littluns and they act like mini adults" showing how there trying to be mini adults to secure the littluns. And i like the strong ending. One thing you could add is some more angry parts on roger's end, even though it seems you have enough i think if u added more it would make him more terrifying
Kira-
I agree with dj. It was a strong way to start your beginning with. It really draws the reader in to your entry. You also showed Roger's emotions on Jack and Ralph. It really tells me all of the hatred that Roger feels towards Ralph's "stupid" rules and how they should be hunting and having fun instead of building a fire. One thing that I would like to see is a small conversation that Roger has between Ralph or Jack. I think it would show verbally how Roger hates Ralph or loves Jack. That would be cool to do.
-sky
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